The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
GRAPHICS IN
THIS
TEST INTRODUCE THE READER ABOUT
THE TOP TEN Change preposition
TO
COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST ALLOCATION ON TRAVEL IN 2014. THE TOP TEN COUNTRIES
WERE DISPLAYING THE READER ABOUT EXPENDITURE BASED ON THE CALCULATION OF US $TONS
. COUNTRIES
FROM THE INFORMATION chart CONTAINS THE WELL KNOWN
Add a hyphen
WELL-KNOWN
COUNTRIES
, SUCH
AS: CHINA
, THE UNITED STATES, GERMANY, THE UNITED KINGDOM, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA, AND TAIWAN
. THE INFORMATION FROM chart WAS USING MULTIPLE OF 20 SCALES WHICH STARTS FROM 0 TO 120. THEN
THE GRAPH WAS SHOWED
WITH Wrong verb form
SHOWN
HORIZONTAL
DISPLAY WHICH IS ACCOMPANIED BY THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4. Correct article usage
A HORIZONTAL
THIS
WAS RELATED TO THE SOURCE FROM UNWTO
OVERALL
COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST COSTUMER EXPEND ON tour 2014 FALL INTO CHINA
. THE NUMBER ONE COUNTRY WITH CONCENTRATE 110 US $TONS
. NEXT
RATED ACCORDED TO THE UNITED STATES AND GERMANY WITH 85 US $TONS
, AND ALSO
FOLLOWED BY THE UNITED KINGDOM WITH 55 US $TONS
, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US $TONS
, INDIA WITH 15 US $TONS
, THEN
MALAYSIA WITH 12 US $TONS
. THE LAST
RATED IN GRAPHIC SHOWED BY THE COUNTRY OF TAIWAN
WITH 10 US $TONS
CONSUMED IN 2014
IN TERMS OF COMPARISON OF DONATION CONSUMER
Fix the agreement mistake
CONSUMERS
ON
Change preposition
IN
CHINA
WITH TAIWAN
WERE
CONTAINED 100 US $Unnecessary verb
apply
TONS
. AS THE chart SHOW THE PURCHASER EXPENDED ON CHINA
IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN TAIWAN
. THE ANOTHER FACT THAT READER
CAN Correct article usage
THE READER
TOOK
FROM THE GRAPH WAS FROM TOP TO BOTTOM, UNITS OF SPENDING Change the verb form
TAKE
WAS
DECREASING FROM ONE TO ANOTHER. THERE ARE 2 (TWO) Correct subject-verb agreement
WERE
COUNTRIES
THAT HAVE THE EQUALIZATION OF SPENDING COSTUMERS
EACH OTHER. SOME Correct your spelling
CUSTOMERS
COUNTRIES
IN ASIA WAS
TELLING US TO CONTINUE AND DOMINATE COMPARED TO OTHER CONTINENTS IN YEARS OF 2014.
THE CONCLUSION FROM THE DIAGRAM WAS TELLING US ABOUT MONEY SPENT ON tour 2014. WE HAVE KNOWN THE Correct subject-verb agreement
WERE
PEOPLE
REPUBLIC OF Change noun form
PEOPLE'S
CHINA
BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING PATRON IN 2014. CHINA
NEIGHBOURING Change noun form
CHINA'S
COUNTRIES
, HONG KONG AND TAIWAN
ARE INCLUDED. THAT ALSO
RELATED TO Add a missing verb
IS ALSO
NUMBER
OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR VERY BIG TRAVELSCorrect article usage
THE NUMBER
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, tons, china, taiwan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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