Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

it
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It
is believed by some people, that Government
tend
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tends
to allocate funds, to specific sectors (e.
g
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G
music, art) whereas, some other citizens are of the opinion that
this
funds
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fund
should rather be allocated to public services,
such
as creation of buses, trains and schools. I am of the opinion that funds should be allocated to public services rather than
arts
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the arts
, and below I would state my reasons why.
Firstly
, one can say why not focus on art, since it generates more revenue? The public services
offer
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offers
more employment to people in need of jobs. The
rate
at which people are unemployed is at a high
rate
, and
this
is due to funds not being allocated in places like schools and other services.
for
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For
example I
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example, I
have a cousin who has a bachelor degree in English, but due to lack of schools in the society, he
has not be
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has not been
able to use his skills, and it's enabling him
become
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to become
a waste to the society, as he is not offering any value to the system Another thought that comes to mind is the Less Privileged, what thoughts are giving towards them? If funds were dispersed to the public
sector we
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sector, we
can create homes, and providing shelter for them. The
rate
at which people who do not have shelter die, is at an alarming
rate
. I believe everyone in a society is equal and they should be treated as
such
. On the street where I reside we have so many beggars, and what role are they playing in the economy.
in
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In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
am of the opinion that more thought as well as money should be placed towards the public sector, even though it might not yield high returns, but we can at least cater for the citizens of the state, which should be the top priority of the Government.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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