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Some people believe that universities should offer places to young students with high marks. Other believe that people of all ages and with low grades should be allowed to study. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #grades #study
As
education
 is becoming more and more important in
this
 modernized
world people
Accept comma addition
world, people
aften
many times at short intervals
often
 argue whether people of all ages should be
allowd
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allowed
aloud
hallowed
 in universities or not. I strongly support the idea of
education
 for all
age
Suggestion
ages
. In the era of modernization all the people are wanting
education
Suggestion
an education
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 based on one example of my mother and father.
now
Suggestion
Now
 a days everything required
education
 like
operationg
involved in a kind of operation
operating
 mobile phone, computer and even tv. People
may some times belomes
Suggestion
may sometimes become
may sometimes belomes
may sometimes becomes
may some times becomes
 helpless when the moments like emergency and they have the help of modern equipments only
then
 it will become very
problemetic
open to doubt or debate
problematic
. So,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 conclude that one should be able to have the basic
education
 and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will justify that with an example. I
also
 want to add a point like elder people
learing
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
learn
layering
 can be again
usefull
being of use or service
useful
 for younger people and no one can stop the mind if it wants to learn anything new.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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