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Some people prefer to live in a house while other feel that living in an apartment has more advantages. Discuss Advantage and disadvantages

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Today everyone wants a good life for them. In that context, some people believe that living in a
house
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 had more advantage than preferring an apartment whereas others have a reverse opinion. Both sides will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph.
First
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 of all, a
house
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 is a place which is more spacious and open
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 an apartment. By
this
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 mean to say that, if there is an additional member or guest in that
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house
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house, then
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 that
house
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 person's don't have to make any adjustments.
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 leads to a much more comfortability and a simple living than those apartments. A good example of
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 is, if we have to organize any function, that can be easily done
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in
 that
house
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 due to the availability of a large area of lawn. Delving
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 towards the other aspect, which is regarding the cost. As
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at
 present, it is not easy to afford a
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 by an average salary earner, but despite
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 fact, an apartment is more reliable and pocket-friendly which is
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 available
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for
 down payments.
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, as a person who is getting a transfer in his job after every 5 to 6
years so
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years, so
 from that view apartments are the best option for them. To conclude and put forward my view, I clearly vote for the former group rather than the latter one due to much more friendly, as I
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 admit that it has some demerits but despite of
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 it has more advantages.

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