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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the global
illiteracy
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 rates across the region and
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the gender
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gender wise
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. The statistical record was for
last
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 year only. The figures are represented in percentages. Developed countries have a majority literacy rate,
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 lowest in the graph Latin/Caribbean region have around 10% of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 are illiterate. Eat Asia/Oceania records most females were not educated, which
also
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 double the rate of
male
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males
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. In
sub Saharan
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sub-Saharan
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 Africa has around 30%
males
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male
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 and 50 %
female
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females
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illiteracy
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. Arab states are the
second
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 in the figure. Here more than 50% of females are not studied. South Asia tops
in
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the graph. More than 30% of males and 50%
females
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of females
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 are not able to read or write. It shows almost half
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a percentage
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percentage
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percent
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 of people in
total
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the total
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 population are not literate. From the picture, women have higher
illiteracy
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 rates when compared with
man
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men
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.
South east
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Southeast
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 Asia has
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overall
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an overall
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illiteracy
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 rate.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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