it is observed that most governments pay a lot of money for the art projects. For instance, there are more and more paintings and sculptures seen in public places. Some people say that it is wrong and governments should spend more money on other important things of public interest. Do you agree or disagree?

Governments nowadays spend
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of money
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improving the
appearence
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appearance
of various parts of cities . We can see paintings , sculptures, carvings and many more artistic objects on display at crossroads,underpasses &
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diiferent
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different
public places .
This
development is good,
proivded
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proven
that it does not occur at the expense of essential needs.
Such
projects and artistic
monuments
are the need of our hour . First , from
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point of
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it attracts
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of domestic and foreign tourists which
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government
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to generate revenue for development.
Secondly
, it provides
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livelihood
livelihoods
to people living in the vicinity of the building or monument.
In addition
, they
also
help children to learn about their culture &
history
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by learning stories related to it .
On the other hand
,
generally
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these
monuments
require
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of
involment
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involvement
of foreign people to build these
monuments
.
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from
design
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stage to the development stage .
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we need to import
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of foreign
material
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materials
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to build these
monuments
which can be very expensive &
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time consuming
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also
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.which
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can put
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of financial burden on
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growth of our country . Next
almonst
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almost
all the countries require funds for essential needs like providing better healthcare , infrastructure , education and other facilities to their citizens . It seems awkward if a citizen of a country does not have basic healthcare or primary education and the government is occupied
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spending on artistic projects .
Finally
,
i
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believe that allocating funds for artistic projects is indeed good as it makes our living
environmrnt
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environment
more aesthetic .
However
,
such
expenses must be avoided if prerequisites of the people are
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.

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