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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while other think that people can not expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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There are split opinions regarding
job
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 satisfaction versus
job
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 security. Some believe that being happy with one's
job
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 is a priority, whereas
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that it is difficult to just remain contented and so a permanent
job
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 should be preferred.
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, before commenting on my decision both the opinion would be discussed. Examining the former view, the primary argument the supporters would put forward is that some individuals believe that
there
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they're
 satisfied with
there
of them or themselves
their
job
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.
This
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 is because working at a place which gives you pleasure may keep you mentally healthy and
this
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 is turn leads to physical well being
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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 they
also
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 believe that
job
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 satisfaction is beneficial for both, the employee and the employer. The reason is employees tend to become more innovative, enthusiastic and ready to embrace more responsibilities.
On the contrary
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, the latter view
suggest
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suggests
 that a stable employment is more
essential even
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essential, even
 if a person has no
job
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 satisfaction. Because
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 belief is for survival people need a regular income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their basic requirements. There should be an assurance of
recieving
get something; come into possession of
receiving
 a consistent income.
Besides
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this
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, it is
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 true that permanent jobs result in to
job
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 advancement in future. In fact the
some
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
 kind of
job
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 brings professional skills and expertise.
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 may result
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 good position, higher salary and ultimately good retirement perks. To conclude and give my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 support the latter view as for leading a comfortable and a stress free life, working
streadily
at a steady rate or pace
steadily
 is more important. I strongly believe that to live a good life and cope up with our financial responsibility, the feeling of being satisfied is quite bookish.
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