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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

#english #school #languages #risk
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It is known that English is the most spoken
language
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 in the world nowadays (
besides
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 Chinese). Actually, it is the
language
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 that helps people from different countries, cultures and languages
be
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are
 able to communicate with the others, since it is determined as the “standard”
language
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 worldwide. In my view,
language
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 is a tool that
allow
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allows
 people to speak with someone and be able to understand what the other says. I see English as a
language
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 that everybody should learn and speak because the world needs an idiom of reference to help us understand each other.
That is
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 why I think learning
this
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language
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 in all the schools of the world since we are children should be a basic and mandatory subject.
On the other hand
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, we
can not
can not
cannot
 forget all the other languages that exist. All the languages that are spoken are part of different cultures and societies in our planet and we must not let them die. I believe every country which has a local
language
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 should encourage all the citizens to learn how to speak and write their native idiom.
Furthermore
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, I think that having a local
language
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 is a characteristic that makes the country
richer
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rich
 in culture and history. As far as I am concerned, English is a
language
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 that all the people should learn since they are young, and local languages, even though they are minorities, should
also
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 be taught since someone
is born
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bears
, in order to not stop using it and the society lose a very important trait of its history.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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