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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the future, due to the increasing popularity of online shopping, all the stores in small and big cities will close.
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, I do not agree with the foreseen scenario. In my opinion, in the future people will still want to try products in a store, and in some
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cases, people
 will not want to wait for a long
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time
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 of all, in many cases, customers want to test a
product
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 before buying it.
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, usually people visit stores in order to have a glance of the
product
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 or even to try it out.
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, while buying either a pair of shoes or clothes, some customers want to wear them just to verify
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whether
 they are
confortable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 or not.
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, while shopping online is not possible to test the
product
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 before buying it.
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,
delivery
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time
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 might be an issue for someone who wants to buy something and have it right away.
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, only when going to a store is possible to have the
product
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 at the same
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 the
purschase
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
purchase
 happens.
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, if someone needs urgently a new shirt, going to a department store might be the only way to have it.
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,
delivery
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time
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 might be a reason for some people in paying a visit to a shop. In conclusion, while online shopping is on the rise, shops all over the city have some advantages,
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 as allowing the customers to check the
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 in person and no
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time
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 at all. So, I believe that shops around towns and cities will not be closing anytime soon.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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