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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in differenr age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in differenr age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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 bar chart illustrates the proportion of gender in a different
age
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, from 15 years old to over, of Australian people who did usually exercise in 2010. At first glance,
men
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 and
women
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trend
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 are not the same.
Men
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 peaks at teenagers, 15 to 24 years old, made up 52.8% and decreased to the lowest of all by 39.5% in
age
 between 39.5% before gradually
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 to 46.7% at
age
 65 and over.
Women
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trend
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 were not like
men
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. Teenage
women
 were 47.7% before moderately
increased
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 to the peak of all
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53.5% at
age
 45 to 54.
Then
 slightly dipped down to 47.1% at ages 65 or over which
were
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 less than the teenage
women
 only 0.6%. In summary,
men
 usually did
physical
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a physical
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 activity
in
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a teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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,
while
women
 liked to do it in the middle ages, but rage is nearly the same when
their
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ages
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of
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65 or over. Yet comparing
of
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both sexes,
women
is
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are
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 likely to do exercise or active activity than
men
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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