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Crime rates within our society are increasing at a very rapid rate. Give causes and solutions.

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From a past few years have seen a dramatic increase in criminal activities.It
is inclining
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is inclined
 at an expedite rate in all over the world.
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 essay will elaborate the reason which
cause
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causes
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 problem with some solutions to tackle
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 issue in subsequent paragraphs with a
meannigful
having a meaning or purpose
meaningful
 conclusion. There are myriad of reasons why crime is surging up day by day
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But the most
prepondarent
having superior power and influence
preponderant
 aspect of
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 trend is unemployment and poverty.Due to
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this
plural of "this"
these
 folks do not able to fulfil their basic demands and desires.
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, just to accomplish their
needs they
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needs, they
 include in bad companies.
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For
 instance
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 in India, in 2015
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 a survey was conducted by experts which showed that
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more crimes
 are found in developing countries as compared to developed countries
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,
 there are some steps to resolve
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problem it
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problem, it
 is
responsibility
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the responsibility
 of
rhe
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the
 government to provide
good
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better
 job to
humuns
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humans
 so that
ther
people in general
they
there
their
 will able to fulfil their demands and desires. Parents should teach good
lofe
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 lesson to their children that how to
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satisfy
 with
thing
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things
a thing
 which they have and
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 teach them moral and ethical values
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 It is quite beneficial for their future. To recapitulate
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from the above discussion
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 it can be
apprehanded
fully understood or grasped
apprehended
 that
government
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the government
 should implement strict rules for those people who are involved in criminal activities. Individuals should know their
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responsibilities and
 do work with honestly.
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