All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity, how could it be tackled?

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Across the globe,
people
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of all age groups are dealing with the increasing
problems
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problem
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of obesity. The main causes are
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle and physical inactivity in daily life. The
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seminars,
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taxes on unhealthy
food
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would be the possible solutions to make
people
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fit. One of the main
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of
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people
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becoming
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obese is that
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they eat more junk
food
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, readymade packaging
food
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rather than homemade
food
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.
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the
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people
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are doing sitting jobs and just because of their laziness, they prefer to buy
food
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from
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restaurants.
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, the consumption of
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type of
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has risen considerably in
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20 years.
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problem can be tackled if
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should take
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proper steps and
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tax
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on
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unhealthy eatables, so that one must think twice before buying them. The second main reason is that after spending a lot of time at work,
people
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want to be relaxed and they do not want to do any kind of exercise, which makes them flabby.
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, after coming back from
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work
people
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sit in front of the TV and enjoy unhealthy munching.
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gym membership plans are very costly which
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affects
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the budget of
a common men
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.
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possible solution
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this
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problem is that
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the sports or fitness clubs should provide discounts on their membership so that
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average individual can join them and
makes
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make
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their body fit and healthy. In conclusion, I would say that, overeating
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junk
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and probably no exercising leads to the risk of obesity. The proper measures should be taken by the government
as well as
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fitness clubs so that
people
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get physically active.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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