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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The behaviour of the tourists in other countries than theirs has become a disputable issue, whether they should act following the customs of the
country
 they are visiting or they should be freed from these kinds of restrictions. In
this
 essay I will discuss both views and
then
 will give my opinion. Nowadays, in many countries the tourism has become an important sector of
economy
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the economy
, which supports the
country
 wealth.
Hence
, the citizens of the host
country
 should be more tolerant
to
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of
 the cultural differences the travellers bring with them.
Otherwise
, it is very possible that due to some
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
 demands people would prefer to change the visiting destination.
Moreover
, by giving the newcomers the freedom to perform their own culture and habitual lifestyle the welcoming
country
 will benefit from learning new things. A good example of
this
 can serve the flow of tourists from Iran in
time
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the time
 of their New Year.
This
 gives opportunity to Armenians to learn interesting things about their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
.
However
, there are not few voices that would insist on
idea
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the idea
 that the visitors should follow the local customs, since it is the way to show the respect to the culture and the people of the
country
 they
are host in
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are hosted
are hosted in
.
In addition
, it helps to understand that
country
 better and dipper.
For instance
, there are Armenian women who do not complain; even they appreciate their experience of wearing scarves while travelling in Iran.
Thus they
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Thus, they
 could understand the feelings of Iranian women. I firmly believe that cultural differences should be welcomed, for it is a very good way to learn from others and not to be isolated in one and only national culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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