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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter • thank them for the photos and for the holiday • explain why you didn’t write earlier • invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #photos #didn’t
I’m writing
this
 letter to express my gratitude
on
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 the holiday vacation that we’ve made. I love the pictures that you’ve sent to me and thank you for that. I am very sorry for the late response and would you like to go and stay
with
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at
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 my beach house? I received the photos
last
 week and they were beautiful and priceless too. I would like to thank you for sending those shots. I really appreciate our bonding moments during our holiday. The reason why I didn’t reply to you is
because
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 I need to finish my reports.
Further
, our manager appointed me to discuss the financial performance of our company. I would like you to invite
to
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me to
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 our beach house on the 25th of March. I already planned
such
 fun activities that we can do, like sunbathing, barbecue party and so on. I hope that you are available on that day and you can invite some of your friends. Can’t wait to bond with you. Regards, Rhea

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