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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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Some people tend to maintain old lifestyle in contemporary society, they live in the same house, work the same job, keeping their usual habit years by years.
However
,
today
Suggestion
today's
todays
 youth enjoy changing and challenges, looking forward to new experiences. Personally, I prefer the
second
 approach, for several reasons, and
this
 essay will examine it. In my view, changing in
life
 is
a
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an
 essential method to maintain your
life
 interesting and worth living.Changing give you the opportunity to learn new
knowledge
 and being up to date. Nowadays, lacking of new acquaintance and being conservative affect your career.
For instance
, a research
investigate
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investigates
 that present-day employer
tend
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tends
 to
favor
promote over another
favour
 personnel with critical and audacious thinking rather than traditionalist.
Furthermore
, I believe that changing reinforce people by making them more persistent, more confident,
more stronger
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stronger
 and more patient. Successful people always catch their opportunity to change, because it is impossible to be ideal in one field without perfecting current
knowledge
 and achieving new experiences.
On the other hand
, conservative people just keeping everything in a hierarchical way, living and staying in the similar position for the entire
life
. Fortunately,
this
 truth
only recognise
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only recognises
 on elderly people from previous generations,
obviously
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obvious
 opposition with recent perspective. Youth, with the new thinking of creating a better world with their changes,
are contributing
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is contributing
 in constructing a contemporary society where people have valuable experience and
knowledge
 through
their changing in
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their changing
life
. In conclusion, I totally support the view that change in
life
 is essential in building an interesting
life
 with learning new
knowledge
 and gaining worthy experience
for
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of
in
 your
life
.
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