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Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child’s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Children's
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Child
development
 is a complex situation of many factors. Some individuals are of the opinion that parents have the most significant part in a child’s
development whereas
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development, whereas
 others opine that friends and other environmental factors
such
 as TV and other media have a more important role.
However I
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However, I
 personally believe that home is the foundation of children personal
development
.
Firstly
, more than anyone's parents has the direct connection with children
,
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,
therefore
, parents make significant influence for children behaviour patterns and the attitudes. In the process of personal
development
 religious values and the cultural norms
also
 playing a significant role
accordingly
, parents put more attention to teach social core values for their children. The other reason is that parents are usually more familiar with
children
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children's
 moods and learning
abilities
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abilities, hence
hence
, parents are in a position to teach all the necessary things.
For example
, language is one of the main
factor
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factors
 in the personal
development
, there are some children who have an ability learn a few languages at one time. The reason behind is that there is an environment is crate within the
family thereby
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family, thereby
 children have a natural space to develop language abilities at home.
Secondly
, some parent’s knowledge and educational background are not up to the saddened level for upbringing of their children as a consequence, friends and media and other external factors have more pivotal roles. Compare to the parents' friends are considerably more up to date and that will enable them to learn each other’s. Due to updated skills and ability of new technology children are more knowledgeable and that will lead them to learning each other and that will directly contribute to the children's
development
. The impact of the media
also have
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also has
 some effect for the child grows.
For instance
, those who are listening, reading and watching some movies and TV programmes build their knowledge and that will lead for children personal growth.Considering all the factors media
also
 contributing some knowledge for children's growth. In conclusion,
although
 some people may agree that friends and media can be better origins
for
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in
of
to
 the personal
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 of children, I personally believe that the role of the parent could be more impressive.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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