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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by estimating and reporting the main feature, and make the comparison where necessary.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by estimating and reporting the main feature, and make the comparison where necessary.
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Hospitals roads are significantly important when it comes to traffic in emergencies and people travelling from
long
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distance
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 should be easy to locate
the
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their
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 destination quite easily.
Couple
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 of maps
provided
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are provided
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 below
which
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shows the
road
 access to a city hospital between the year 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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According to
2007
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the 2007
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 layout,
city
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the city
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road
 in
south
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the south
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 was straight when compared to 2010 which now has
the
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a
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 roundabout near
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 in between
Bus
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the Bus
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 stop was converted to
station
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the station
a station
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 in
west
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the west
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 near
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 and that was
major
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a major
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 change in 2010.
Due to
this
conversion
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the
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there was

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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