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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Whether or not, bad circumstance is a picayune or substantially significant topic, has triggered an untold number of debates among various walks of
life
.
in
Suggestion
In
 my opinion
,
Accept space
,
changing bad
situation
 is
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 necessary in each person's
life
. On the one hand
,
Accept space
,
 some people hold the view that, it is better for most people to accept hardship situations in their
life
.
Accept space
.
That is
 to say
,
Accept space
,
bad circumstances
such
 as lack of money are common in
life
,
Accept space
,
so rather than challenging with them, it is better to adapt ourselves with them and be patient to pass
this
situation
, is better than trying to change it.
On the other hand
, others hold an opinion that the focal factor in
life
 is to try hard to improve
life
 status. The most compelling reason for their assertion is
,
Accept space
,
trying to figure out solutions to improve
life
condition
 may lead to have
brighter future
Suggestion
a brighter future
brighter futures
.
For instance
, dissatisfaction with job
condition
 may force a person to boost its knowledge and skills and try hard to gain better job position.So trying to improve
bad
Suggestion
a bad situation
situation
 is likely beneficial for each
peson
a human being
person
passion
 in
life
. Considering above mentioned
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with
this
 view that people should provide
solution
Suggestion
a solution
the solution
solutions
 and try hard to change difficult
condition
 of
life
instead
 of accepting it
.
Accept space
.
 To conclude
,
Accept space
,
there are valid argument on both sides of the controversy.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe
that is
 changing bad
situation
 in
life
 that can inspire people to have
better
Suggestion
a better life status
life
 status and the pivotal point in
life
 is, constant effort to have
better
Suggestion
better conditions
a better condition
condition
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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