The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.

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for International at 8o%. The most popular class for

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people put their personal information online (address, telephone number,...) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Task 2. Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.