The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university. Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining secound class degree or better at a major UK university.

Summarise the infomation by selucting and reporting the main features.
This
column chart illustrates
about
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the figure
of
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UK
and
foreigner
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student
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attend
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a
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postgraduates
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or
master
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degrees in various types of
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in
year
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2009. At first glance, both groups of students are interested differently in types of
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subject
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in the
UK
university.
UK
student
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students
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liked to apply
in
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field
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of Art history, Sociology
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the most. Both classes account for 80%. Nursing or English Literature
represent
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the
second
popularity at approximately 75%, and International Law made up the
third
at 70%.
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,
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Electrical Engineer was
least
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popularity
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merely at 65%.
Conversely
, Electrical
Engineer
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were the
second
favorite
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for International at 8o%. The most popular class for
foreigner
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student
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was Information Technology,
meanwhile
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the lowest percentage was
international
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Law.
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,
similar
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a similar
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number of
UK
and International
student
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were equal in
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the Nursing
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and Accountancy
class
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, at roughly 85% and 60% respectively. In summary,
UK
student
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likely
attend
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in
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theorical
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theoretical
subject
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in
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secoundary
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secondary
or
master
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degree, but International
student
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usually applied
in
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practical
class
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classes
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and vice versa.
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