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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree

#growth #shops #town #cities
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It is irrefutable that online shopping has changed the way we purchase goods. Some people believe that the continuous increase in online shopping will lead to permanent closed stores in towns and cities. I totally disagree with
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 argument as online shopping
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 and vendors of the shops work together.
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, profits may decrease sometime, but business has increased for both the
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 owners as well as
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 creators.
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 and foremost, any
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 ordered over the internet is usually delivered by local
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 owners.
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, none of the online website maintains goods, they rely on local vendors to deliver products with sufficient profit. To illustrate
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, a mediocre town, has limited variety of
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, as he has space constraint.
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, he can provide a better range of
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 online, using
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 party
platform
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.
As a result
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, the owner does not have to maintain a large
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 line and does save a lot
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 space.
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, it helps him in reducing the running cost of the
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 and generate similar profits. Another advantage of using internet
platform
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 is running two similar shops from one. While, there is already a real
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 available for anyone to visit and see the
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,
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 virtual shops is running without a lot of investment.
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, many owners
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of
 Amazon website are
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 owners and sell
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 online to generate extra revenue. As it allows, owners to ship their
product
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 to any part of the country with ease and most of the packing and delivery is done by
third
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 party. It is actually a no headache for
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 owner as they are running a regular
shop
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 and generating an extra income. In conclusion, despite people being worried about the future of retail shops in towns and cities. In my opinion, purchasing goods online is not at all harmful for
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shop owner
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the shop owner
shop owners
, as they create significant profits using similar
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 and are not frightened of
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 change.

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