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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the average
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greenhouse emissions per
person
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 in four countries of Europe, namely the United Kingdom, Italy, Sweden and Portugal in a period of time from 1967 to 2007.
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, it is clear to see that the UK citizen had by far the highest,
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inhabitant
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 had the lowest in these 40 years. As the graphs
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,
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 Kingdom started with a value of nearly 12
tonnes
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 in 1967, and
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, it decreased constantly until reaching 9
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 in 2007. Making the British citizen the most polluting compared to the other European countries. Regarding
Swedish's
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 approximately 8.5
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 in 1967,
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, it increased constantly during the period between 1967 and 1977 until reaching a peak of over 10
tonnes
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 in 1977.
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, it witnessed a dramatic reduction from 1977 to 1987 and a
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 decrease until it fell to just under 6
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 in 2007.
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, Italian and Portuguese inhabitants experienced a stealthy rise during these 40 years. They started with a value of 4 and 1.8
tonnes
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 per citizen respectively, to an average of almost 8 for Italian and 6 for Portuguese in 2007.
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