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Band 4.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The provided line graph shows information about the numbers of people who
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 the underground
station
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 in London around the clock of a typical day. As is observed from the graph, the busiest times at the underground
station
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 are 8:00 am and 6:00 pm. The highest numbers of people
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 the
station
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 in the morning and more specifically at around 8:00 in the morning. A rapid growth can be observed between 6:00 am and 8:00 am in the morning when around 400 people
use
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 the
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 at around 7:30 am.
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 quickly drops to below 200 at around 10:00 am. Ag
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Again, this
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number
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 rises between 11:00 and 3:00 pm when around 300 people
use
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 the underground
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 with some fluctuations. In the afternoon,
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number
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 decline, with less than 100 people using the
station
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 at 4:00 pm. At 6:00 pm
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 re
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t 380. After 7:00 pm, the total
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 of passengers declines significantly and fluctuates for the
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 two hours from 8:00 pm to 10:00 pm. In summary, London underground
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 remains busy in the starting of the day at morning and in the early evening.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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