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65. Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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This
 is true that, many students forced to live by their own to pursue higher education while others are able to live with their parents.
However
, a couple of problems emerge due to the same. From my perspective, both sides have some benefits and drawbacks. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of staying alone.
Firstly living
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Firstly, living
 away from home encourages them independence. The reason is that they need to do all by themselves,
such
 as cooking and washing.
Secondly
, Students can application in routine based and they can able to balance in everyday life.
As a result
, they would have opportunities to develop the time management skill, which is certainly one of the most essential skill in future carrier.
However
, In order to pay their living cost some students need to work while studying that might make them fall behind from their application.
On the other hand
, those who live with their families do not need to worry much about their living cost and they are able to economize since they do not have to pay for accomodation.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 can completely concentrate on their investigation to make the best performance at university.
However
, family routines are often disruptive for students who need to focus on their studies in a quiet atmosphere. Without dedicated space for studying, it is hard for students to keep up with their review schedule. To recapitulate, while there will be clearly differences in personal circumstances of individual university students, some advantages and disadvantages of living alone and with families can be identified.
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