The chart below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts show the proportions of British

students

at a University in England who can speak other languages as a secondary

language

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the year

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year

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years

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2000 and 2010.

Overall

, it can be seen that

the

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apply

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most of the

students

have

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preferred to speak

Spanish

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the Spanish

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language

in both years. As per observation, in

year

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the year

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2000, there are 20%

people

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of people

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who

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apply

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know no other languages

while

in 2010

this

ratio

has

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decreased and became the least among all.

Similarly

, in the case of French as a secondary

language

, it reduced by 5% in 2010 and reached 10%, which is exactly the same as

German

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the German

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language

in 2010 and 2000. There are some

students

who have the skills to speak two other languages and as per the

charts

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this

kind of interest has developed with time and reached 15% in 2010. The majority of the

students

speak

Spanish

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the Spanish

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language

as there is

also

a marginal increment in numbers: 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010. One out of three

students

have

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has

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preferred to speak another

language

in both

the

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apply

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years.

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

176 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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