The diagram below shows the stages in the food production chain of the United States. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration demonstrates the steps of a
food
manufacturing process in America.
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Overall
, America's Linking Words
food
production is a Use synonyms
six stage
process that begins with the shipment of cattle as the source of meat and Add a hyphen
six-stage
finally
produced Linking Words
the
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beef
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food
product for human consumption at home and Use synonyms
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in restaurant
restaurant
.
First of all, the cow is delivered by ship Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
in
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to
the
production where the barn is available for the cow storage, shelter, and feeding. After that, the processing takes place for the cow slaughter and Correct article usage
apply
producing
the meat Replace the word
production
and
is Correct word choice
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subsequently
cut into the desired sizes and meat product standard. From Linking Words
this
, the ingredients and spices are added to taste before the processed foods are ready for packaging.
Following that, the processed Linking Words
beef
products are stored in the distribution building as a buffer zone ready for transport. Use synonyms
Next
to that, Linking Words
beef
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food
products are transported to the retail outlet and Use synonyms
restaurant
wherein the Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
food
chefs cooked the delicious Use synonyms
beef
dish. Use synonyms
Finally
, people either in the home or in the restaurant enjoyed eating the variety of Linking Words
beef
dishes.Use synonyms
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