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Many people these days change career throughout their working life. What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development for them personally and for the society as a whole?

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In our professional
enivronment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
, we come across people who keep on changing their
career
 throughout their
life
 without considering its impact on their
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
. I believe that
this
 affects their professional
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 negatively and has
same affect
Suggestion
the same effect
same effect
 on the society and people around them. Since the beginning of our professional
career
, we start to work on developing our skills and expertise which will keep us elevating from
one
 step to another. Each step in a
career
 requires certain skills to excel to the
next
one
. Once we master all skills and gather experience along the way we reach the top but
this
 will only happen if we stick with and keep on making necessary efforts. There are those who keep on changing their
career
path
 during the working
life
 believing that
this
 way they will achieve and learn more than an average person. But
this
 is not what they actually achieve and
hence
 they cannot progress on
one
 straight
path
. Nowadays, at the start of schooling teachers begin to ascertain the aptitude of each child so that they can be set on a
path
 on which they reach to the top. It
has been establish
Suggestion
has been established
 from various scientific and academic studies or surveys that continuing to focus on the
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
 of a single profession results in a successful
career
 and
life
. In conclusion, those who keep on learning on
one
career
path
 excel more than those doing
otherwise
. People can keep learning different aspects of
life
 as
hobby but
Suggestion
a hobby, but
a hobby but
 professional careers should be developed by shear dedication and focus.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career transition
  • Job satisfaction
  • Financial incentives
  • Technological advancements
  • Skills obsolescence
  • Job stability
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Work-life balance
  • Career flexibility
  • Life-long learning
  • Social perceptions
  • Economic factors
  • Skill acquisition
  • Professional development
  • Societal trends
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