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The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given illustration represents the middle band points in the participants
the
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 IELTS General Test by people of various language classes in 2010. In general, the table describes scores for all sections
together with
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 the
overall
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 mark. As
it
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can be seen, the total medium tape grade of
German
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troop
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 is the highest and occupied 6.7 points.
In addition
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,
this
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 body possessed the
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 score almost in all sections, with only one exception in
reading
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 part, where they step back to the Malay crowd. The table data clearly shows that French language candidates are in
the
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second
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 place with
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overall
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an overall
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 ring -
6.5
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. Especially they depicted significantly higher results in
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 part in comparison with Indonesian and Malay groups, covering 6.5 points. Returning to the details, after French groups with
overall
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 6.3 bands were Indonesian speaking groups, they're
the
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highest point in the exam was at the Speaking part and maintained 6.7.
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, Malay society candidates represented the lowest scores with
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overall
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an overall
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 band
6.4
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of 6.4
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, and
this
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 is the highest indicator than in the other participants' group in the Reading section.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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