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The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table gives us data about what are the percentages of
water
 which is benefited for several goals in different states.
Overall
, when we looked at the charts in general, we can easily see that Nigeria utilizes
water
 for agriculture more than other countries.
However
,
UK
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 has the smallest proportion
for
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 using
water
 for agriculture.
While
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 benefits
water
 more than the other five states for industry, Nigeria has the lowest percentage for
this
 purpose.
Although
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 utilizes
water
 for domestic less than the others, Brazil has the highest proportion. When we looked at the tables in more
details
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, despite
of
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the fact that Nigeria’s rate of
water
 usage for agriculture is 86%,
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 has the lowest rate equaling
to
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28
percent
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.
While
 the percentage of utilizing
water
 for
industry
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 in
UK
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 is 67
percent
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, Nigeria has the lowest rate which is just 3
percent
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. Brazil leads with 17
percent
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 for domestic purposes,
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 has the smallest proportion being 5
percent
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 in
this
 category.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, uk, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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