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The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the proportions of water which is used for various purposes in six countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table gives us data about what are the percentages of
water
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 which is benefited for several goals in different states.
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, when we looked at the charts in general, we can easily see that Nigeria utilizes
water
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 for agriculture more than other countries.
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 has the smallest proportion
for
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 using
water
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 for agriculture.
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UK
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the UK
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 benefits
water
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 more than the other five states for industry, Nigeria has the lowest percentage for
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 purpose.
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UK
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the UK
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 utilizes
water
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 for domestic less than the others, Brazil has the highest proportion. When we looked at the tables in more
details
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, despite
of
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the fact that Nigeria’s rate of
water
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 usage for agriculture is 86%,
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UK
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the UK
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 has the lowest rate equaling
to
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28
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percent
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per cent
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.
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 the percentage of utilizing
water
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 for
industry
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the industry
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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 is 67
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percent
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per cent
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, Nigeria has the lowest rate which is just 3
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percent
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per cent
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. Brazil leads with 17
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percent
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per cent
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 for domestic purposes,
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UK
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the UK
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 has the smallest proportion being 5
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percent
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per cent
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 in
this
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 category.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, uk, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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