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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
blue print
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blueprint
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 of wave-energy
mamchine
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machine
 and its location.
This
machine
 is used to generate
electicity
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electricity
, the farther the installation from shore the higher its cost and output. Wave energy
machine
 has two chambers one is submersed
into
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in
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water
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the water
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 and
other
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the other
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 is exposed to the Atmosphere.Each chamber works in its own style.the chamber submersed in the water generates
electricity
 by the
air flow
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airflow
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 which comes from waves and rotates the turbine blades
thus
 producing
electricity
.
on the other
hand
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 the chamber exposed to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 has an inlet for
air
 to flow into the
machine
 which rotates the turbine blade and generates
electricity
. Both
the
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apply
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chambers
has
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have
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 outlets through which the
air
 escapes from the
machine
. These machines are generally placed in
sea water
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seawater
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,two places are prefered to place these machines one is nearer to the shore and the other is deep into the ocean. the
later
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latter
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 produces high output because of large waves hitting the
machine
, and the former produces low output because of small waves.
Cost
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 of installation is directly
proportion
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proportional
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 to the distance of
machine
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the machine
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 from the shore. All in all these machines are used to generate
electricity
 using
air
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, electricity, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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