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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect theenvironment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have onanimal life and human society

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Dear Ben, Thank you for sharing your the deepest worry in your heart. I understand how you
feel but
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feel, but
 rest assured because Dr. Wise has got your back. I think it is important to know why your parents stop you from being a singer and make changes to prove them you are well-prepared for all uncertainties. Have you ever talk to them about the reason of not letting you
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 the program? I believe that all parents existing cares about their
chhildren
a young person of either sex
children
 and would provide unconditional love and support to their kids.
However
,
typical reality show
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the typical reality show
a typical reality show
 may give them a bad impression as it is not hard for us to see judges teasing the contestants on TV.
Thus
, it is understandable that they want to prevent you from getting hard feelings. If you are sure about your passion and your choice, here are some advice for you to persuade your parents effectively.
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