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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet without any face to face contact with others. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
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 21st century when the
internet
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 is accessible to almost everyone, e--commerce, online shopping and working via
internet
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 has never been
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 easy. While simultaneously there are definitely some negative impacts of
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 “online lifestyle”
,
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,
nevertheless
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 I believe that
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 is indeed a positive development
for
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of
 individuals and society alike.
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 of all, over the
last
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 few decades, online shopping has taken a huge leap. Extremely popular sites like Amazon and Ebay (to name a few) have led the way to thousands of other similar online shopping websites. These online stores not only provides
variety
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a variety
 of clothing and accessory
collections but
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collections, but
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 has maintained a quick delivery system worldwide and efficient customer services.
thereby
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Thereby
 gaining the trust of people for online purchases.
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therefore people
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Therefore, people
Therefore people
 are more encouraged to shop online rather than spend hours stuck in traffic getting from one place to another.
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, online shopping does save a lot of time and
effort especially
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effort, especially
 for business persons or stay at home moms.
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, it has now been almost impossible to work in any institution or office without using
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 facilities. Meetings and conference calls have become an integral part of our work lifestyle. Applications like Skype, Viber and Gmail has made it possible to finalize business deals worldwide without even the need for stepping out of ones home. Many mothers or students can now become entrepreneurs and run profitable businesses with the aid of online services. Undoubtedly it does save a lot of time
,
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,
money and effort without compromising quality
,
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,
 service and profits. With the invention of
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internet
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the internet
 and social networking sites, people can now keep in touch with friends and family from all around the world from the own comfort of ones home. They can even get acquainted with new individuals who share same interests and become friends through video chats without even meeting face-t-o face.
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 there are definitely some drawbacks of
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 kind of online lifestyle
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 to me, the advantages outweigh them all. In conclusion, I would like to say that technological advances
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have given
had given
 us the opportunity to make our lives more productive and efficient and
internet
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 facilities
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 as online shopping, working or communicating via
internet
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 is indeed a boon for the society as a whole around the world.

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