The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares five countries namely
France
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,
USA
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, Spain, China and Italy in terms of the
number
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of
tourists
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and tourist expenditure in the years 2012 and 2013. In general, the
number
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of
tourists
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in
France
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was highest
while
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the highest spending on international tourism was seen in the
USA
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during the period shown.
In addition
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, both the
number
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of
tourists
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and the amount of money spent by
tourists
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of
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the five nations mentioned increased slightly. In 2012, the
number
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of
travelers
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travellers
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in
France
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and the
USA
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were
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83
million
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and 66.7
million
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respectively, and after one year, these figures increased slightly to 84.7
million
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and 69.8
million
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. There was a 3
million
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rise in the
number
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of Spanish
tourists
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while
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China saw
an
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decrease in the
number
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of
travelers
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during the period shown. The
number
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of
tourists
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in Italy was lowest in 2012 and grew by 1.3
millions
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in 2013. With regard to tourist spending, the
USA
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had the highest tourist spending ($126.2
billion
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)
while
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the lowest expenditure was seen in Italy ($41.2
billion
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) in 2012. These figures rose to $139.6
billion
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and $43.9
billion
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respectively.
In addition
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,
France
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, China and Italy witnessed an increase in the amount of money spent by their
tourists
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, usa, number, tourists, million, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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