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Band 5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart outlines the top ten countries that made the highest
travel
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 expenses in 2014 and
also
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 compares how many countries were spent on trips in the same year. Data collected from UNWTO. Overall, China tops the list with the highest spending while Taiwan proclaims the tenth
position
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. As the diagram shows, China spent nearly 110
billion
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 USD in 2014 on a trip. Expenditures used to carry out a trip can be caused by several factors. One of the factors that influence these expenses is due to the large number of Chinese who
travel
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 in and out of their
country
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. So that at the time of the survey,
this
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 Chinese
country
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 had a very large
expenditure
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 compared to other countries.
Furthermore
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, in
second
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 place is the United States, which has expenditures of nearly 85
billion
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.
This
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 turned out to be
also
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 achieved by Germany with
expenditure
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 of nearly 85
billion
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 in the
third
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position
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.
That is
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, both countries have the same amount of
expenditure
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.
However
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, there may be a reason that
put
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puts
 the United States in
second
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 place compared to Germany in
third
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. That reason, maybe
that is
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 known by who made the survey. In the fourth
position
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 filled by Britain spent around 55
billion
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.
This
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 figure turns out to be less than half the expenses incurred by China to
travel
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.
However
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, British spending on
this
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 trip more than doubled Singapore which ranks fifth. The sixth
position
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 is filled by South Korea, which has expenses for
travel
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 around 20
billion
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.
This
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 was
also
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 experienced by Hong Kong, which had the same expenses as South Korea, which was around 20
billion
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 USD in 2014 for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
. In
this
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 case, it turns out to be the same as the United States and Germany. There must be a special reason that makes South Korea on top of Hong Kong despite having the same amount of expenses. Meanwhile, expenses spent by India were approximately around 15
billion
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.
This
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 makes India in eighth
position
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.
Next
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 is Malaysia which has a total
expenditure
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 of around 12
billion
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, which causes
this
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country
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 to occupy the ninth
position
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. In the tenth or lowest
position
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 is occupied by Taiwan with
expenditure
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 of around 10
billion
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 USD. The conclusion is that China is the highest among the nine other countries on the bar chart, while Taiwan is
the lowest
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the low
-cost
country
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 to
travel
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. Meanwhile the United States and Germany have similar expenses that are used to
travel
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.
Likewise
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 with Hong Kong and South Korea, these two countries
also
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 have the same expenses that are used to
travel
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.

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  • Increase
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