The charts below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The charts below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart depicts the proportion of people who ate five portions of fruits and
vegetables
each day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest percentage of consuming fruit and
vegetables
was women,
while
children considerably accounted for the least. The percentage of women who ate fruit and
vegetables
started at just over 20 % in 2001.
This
figure,
then
rose steadily to reach a peak of almost 35 % in 2006, before falling slightly to 30 % in the final year. In terms of men and children eating
fruit's
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and
vegetables
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in the first three years (about 17% and 12% respectively.) From
this
point
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the proportion of men climbed up and reached
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about 27 % in both 2006 and 2007, after which it dropped to a boutique 26 %.
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growth in the figure was evident reaching 25 % in 2007 and around 24 % in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • nutritional intake
  • health-conscious
  • percentages
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • public health initiatives
  • recommended intake
  • demographic differences
  • graphical analysis
  • upward/downward trend
  • health implications
  • national averages
  • gender disparities
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