Nowadays, the older people who need employment have to compete with younger people. what problems does this cause and what are the solutions.

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The economy
Economy
is
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the backbone
backbone
a backbone
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backborn
for the country development. Nowadays, The economy is
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foremost
formost
reason and
also
a
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need
needs
to live for each and every person. Because, In the present scenario older people who need employment have to compete with younger people who has just
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graduated
graduate
from the universities. So, I suggest below some causes and solutions.
Firstly
, The old people compete with
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the younger generation
younger generation
to get a job
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opportunity
opportunities
. From that the interviewer
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selects
select
them because of their higher work experience is far more than the young graduates.
Therefore
, The unemployment rates are increased with a
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magnificent
magnificient
percentage.
Moreover
, Those Unemployees youth take steps to do crimes for
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fulfil
fulfils
fullfil
their needs and dreams.
Furthermore
, The young generation
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is getting
has got
has gotten
gets
is get
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depressed from
in depressed from
not having any jobs and they committed
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suicide
suicides
sucides
too. Meanwhile, Most of them are going
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to
for
the outside country to find any jobs and these will create
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a loss
loss
for our economy and our country too. To Contrast, From happened
this
causes the government should take some decisions for the profit in the
both
sides. They encourage people and give subsidies to open the plant or any business, From that our unemployment rate is decreased. Apart from
this
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,
,
They make
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a strong pension related scheme
strong pension related scheme
.
Therefore
, The senior citizen
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does not worry
do not worry
about their future and
this
will get a chance for the young generation to being an employee in
this
industry. Simultaneously, The old public mind is quite rigid and they do not connect with the latest technology as
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the younger
the young
public can do.
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Also
also
, their efficiency is low
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compared
compare
to them.
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And
and
this
will not
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bother
bothered
by any industries.
Thus
, The government open some schemes and
this
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will be given
will be give
support to
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both generations
both of generations
and for the win - win situation for
both
of them too. To conclude, I suggest that the government
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plays
play
a vital
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role
roles
for
both
the generations. I totally agree with my solutions.

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