Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflects the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

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Currently, there are lots of products manufacturing by different companies around the world. They are using plenty of advertisements to sell their stuff to people sometimes it affects to buy. In my opinion, I agree that people willing to buy

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an unnecessary household lure

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by advertisements.

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, advertisements are mainly placed to increase the sales of their manufacture. The growing number of international countries every year trying to upgrade their product's sales from the public,

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, they are fixing billboard and telecasting commercial ads on the television with

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young, attractive

models, sometimes they

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some famous celebrities

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as film actors,

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to act on it to lure the buyers to buy their products.

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the people get attracted through the publicity, they try to get those products without

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the needs of that.

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, online shopping mostly affected by every individual they usually send some mails and cookies to

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, which, push everyone to use some fake products that are really disappointing measures

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, we cannot blame on ads every time, which has so many important advantages to the inhabitant and the users, because it helps to find out the real genuine products which will reduce the time of spending on finding the necessary goods.

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, It tends to finger out the ingredients and manufacturing details. In conclusion, it is clear that ads are unavoidable in the business world, they always focus on sales to rise up, but human we want to differentiate the needs before they try to use.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
emerging consumer needs

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflects the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is, therefore, important to spend money researching other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what exxtent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

nowadays it seems that different that different generations within the family spend less time doing activities together. why is that? is this a positive or negative development.