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Explain the graph for the consumption of the European countries. For meat ,chicken and lamb.

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The shown graph demonstrates the change in the
consumption
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 of
fish
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,
chicken
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,
beef
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 and lamb in Europe country. The graph shows
this
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 change in the period of time, between 1979 and 2004. Starting with the
fish
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consumption
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, it could be concluded that between 1979 and 2004,
fish
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consumption
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rate
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 relatively remains constant 50 grams.
On the other hand
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, for
chicken
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 and the other two types of meat (
beef
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, lamb), their
consumption
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 per person per week differs by
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from
ime. In 1979 the
consumption
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 of lamb reaches to 150 grams, and
then
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 dramatically falls to 50 grams in 2004.
On the contrary
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, the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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 enlarges since 1979. The
consumption
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rate
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 jumps from 150 to 250 grams in the period from 1979 to 2004. For the
second
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 type of meat (
beef
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), the graph
also
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 shows reducing in the
beef
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consumption
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 between 1979 and 2004. The
consumption
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 in 2004 was only 100 grams against 200 grams in 1979 which reflects a huge decrease. In conclusion, the
consumption
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 of
beef
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 and meet rapidly decreased between 1979 and 2004.
In contrast
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, the
consumption
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rate
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 of
chicken
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 showed a huge increase fo
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in
he same time. While the
consumption
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rate
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 of the
fish
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 remained steady .
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