Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Teenager's thinks when they grow up once they finish the
unveirsty
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
the can travel to another
country
where they can be
business man
Suggestion
a business man
in a short period.
However when
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However, when
it comes to
reality it's
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reality, it's
only a
dreams
Suggestion
dream
because the life is very hard when you
leave
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
live
far from your family. I dreamed a lot to leave my
country
and
travel but
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travel, but
after 6 years I realized that living in my
country
is the best thing. Other are
wants
Suggestion
wanting
to visit my
country
to watch the best places and to know more about the
country
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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