• Many young people now know more about international pop and move star than famous in the history of their country. Give the cause and solution to encourage people to know more about their history

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Nowadays, many people are less knowledgeable at their

countrys

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country's

countries

country

historical famous persons than international pop and

move

a form of entertainment that enacts a story by sound and a sequence of images giving the illusion of continuous movement

movie

star. The main reason is that today minority are interested in historical

faces

a powerful effect or influence

forces

and in the same time those historical people have not learned at all yet. The most obvious solutions are can be to increase interest of nation at historical people and find out more about them. People prefer watching

movie

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movies

a movie

the movie

or listening to music more than learning something new about their

countys

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county's

countries

counties

historical faces.

This

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is because many people do not like reading and receiving new information about what they are not keen on. It is not secret that people will not acquire a lot on what they work if they do not do spontaneously. So we should reach their interest on historical face. The most obvious answer is to show them their

countrys

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country's

country

legends of the past on movies in main and sing in songs.

As a result

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, they become aware of great people and start looking for more details. Another reason of these

process

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processes

is those historical people are not being searched enough well. There are many names to peak as an

example who

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example, who

had done a number of useful stuffs in field

such

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as society, economy, science, literature, art and

etc

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

; Unfortunately, we cannot find anywhere so much related to their life, the way how

did they achieved

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did they achieve

did they achieved

or discovered something and other information that are interested

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people, because historians have not studied out. One possibility is government should support historic scholars financially and provide with all needed equipments, so they can investigate more intensively for historical faces.

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, people will be able to learn more. In conclusion, less knowledge of people at historical faces can be solved by searching more about historical persons and increasing peoples interest

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

305 words

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