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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some employers think that their workers should
dress
 wisely, while other companies consider the
quality
 of their workers' performance to be more important than their outfits. While the
quality
 of work is, no doubt, very important,
adhearing
be compatible or in accordance with
adhering
 to specific
dress
 codes of certain business industries is
also
 paramount in order to ensure companies' ability to compete within the industry and attract customers and customer satisfaction. I strongly believe that employees should must
dress
 professionally at all times. Even though
absence
Suggestion
the absence
 of a
dress
 code within a certain company
allowes
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allows
allowed
 workers to feel
more freedom
Suggestion
freer
 and,
as a result
 to feel more satisfied with their jobs overall, and could leave to higher
quality
 of performance, there are some disadvantages of
such
 approach.
Firstry
, there are many
inductries
the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise
industries
 where companies and their employees image
concidered
carefully weighed
considered
 to be speaking to the
quality
 of services they provide, namely law firms, banks, clinics and many others. It is hard to
imagin
form a mental image of something that is not present or that is not the case
imagine
imaging
 a person who would provide prefer to retain a law firm where its employees wear casually over a law firm fully
adhearing
be compatible or in accordance with
adhering
 to
business
Suggestion
the business dress code
dress
 code.
Secondly
, some customers may consider casual look
ti
in the direction of
to
 be a sign that an employee does not take his or her job seriously or does not respect customers.
For example
, it is hard to imagine anyone will be happy to see an elementary teacher wearing mini skirt and a see-through top. It will be viewed to be disrespectful and inappropriate. In conclusion, I support companies promoting strict
dress
 code policies as it ensures customer flow and
consumeres
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
 satisfaction.
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