Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce these increasing levels of crime. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

These days more
crime
rate because of media and ways of living some people
wants
Suggestion
want
more
police
help to
control
this but
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this, but
acccording
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
to me
this
is not right solutions
forto
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for to
reudce
cut down on; make a reduction in
reduce
the
crime
and,
for
Suggestion
to
some extend that way is good but we need to
control
crime
make increase income and try to decrease poverty. In these days only
poverty create
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poverty, create
bad happens in
world
Suggestion
the world
.
Firstly
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am disagree
Suggestion
disagree
am disagreeing
have disagreed
police
only one way to
control
the rate because any country
wants to to find
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wants to find
these
type
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types
of problem find the main reasons of
crime
and bad happen
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
start to
planning
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plan
to reduce.Because some people will not find the solution all of them need to improve it.
Secondly
, media
plays
Suggestion
play
virual role
Suggestion
an overall role
overall role
the overall role
to improve the best and,
crime
free community they make good and motivational shows which
insparied
being of such surpassing excellence as to suggest inspiration by the gods
inspired
the youth and other people that help to decrease
crime rate
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crime rates
the crime rate
.
police
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Police
helps some
etend but
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attend, but
attend but
extend but
not all the yes
ofcouse
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am agree if
govternment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
make very
strick
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stricter
strict
stick
law than
police
help to reduce the
crime
. In
nutshell
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a nutshell
,
Accept space
,
police
plays only 30% role to
control
the
crime
,
Accept space
,
therefore
other part to
control
and reduce
crime
only public and media.
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