In many places, people's lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?

It is obvious that people’s habit is
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transforming
transform
at an exponential rate. While I accept that way of acting can sometimes have a positive effect on consanguinity, I believe that it is more possible to have a detrimental impact. On the one hand, it can be acknowledged that merits of style of living are evident. The main benefit is living condition is better than before. Since
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the world
world
is developed in the direction of industrialization and modernization, the income, medical, education,
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that is
considered the living condition is considered is more stable. For
this
reason, everybody
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tends
tend
to enjoy
life
, they gather together to organize
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outdoor
outdoors
activities, events that make them closer together. An additional advantage would be that the connection between people is meliorate.
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The internet
Internet
strongly spread, people easily meet. In the past, the ways of interaction were very limited, if you want to speak with your friend, you would have to go directly to his house or send him a message which may take
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a few days
few days
to get a response. Nowadays, it's very easy to interact with your relatives -and even with the government and organization - either by emails, mobiles, chatting, etc.
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And
and
I think that
this
has improved the relationships and enhanced it.
However
, I would argue that the drawbacks of the way of
life
changes far eclipse the aforementioned benefits. The most important advantage is that people become
not in physical motion
motionless
emotionless
and apathetic. Technology
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has grown
have grown
rapidly,
therefore
, people do not care another people
instead
of concentrating on their smart phone. To illustrate, Family
life
use to be defined by the dining room table, a place where children did their homework and crafts and families ate together and discussed their day. Now, the dining room table has been replaced by the TV and cell phones. Another negative aspect of
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devices, gadgets
devices gadgets
is making them underestimate family tradition. To make it
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clearer
more clear
more clearly
, as society grows the generation gap gets farther apart. Children always think that the thoughts and actions of adults are old-fashioned and unreasonable.
Hence
, gradually the conception and tradition of the family disappeared.
Last
but not least, the way of living each day makes divorce increasing. The more
life
develops, the greater the gap between rich and poor in society.
Consequently
, when financially pressured, the husband and wife in a family conflict with each other leading to marriage breakdown. In conclusion, I would say that the potential change of style of living
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is
are
more significant than the possible benefits.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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