In many places, people's lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?

#places #people #lifestyle #relationships #developments

It is obvious that people’s habit is

transform

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transforming

at an exponential rate. While I accept that way of acting can sometimes have a positive effect on consanguinity, I believe that it is more possible to have a detrimental impact. On the one hand, it can be acknowledged that merits of style of living are evident. The main benefit is living condition is better than before. Since

world

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the world

is developed in the direction of industrialization and modernization, the income, medical, education,

…

Accept space

…

that is

considered the living condition is considered is more stable. For

this

reason, everybody

tend

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tends

to enjoy

life

, they gather together to organize

outdoors

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outdoor

activities, events that make them closer together. An additional advantage would be that the connection between people is meliorate.

Internet

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The internet

strongly spread, people easily meet. In the past, the ways of interaction were very limited, if you want to speak with your friend, you would have to go directly to his house or send him a message which may take

few days

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a few days

to get a response. Nowadays, it's very easy to interact with your relatives -and even with the government and organization - either by emails, mobiles, chatting, etc.

and

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And

I think that

this

has improved the relationships and enhanced it.

However

, I would argue that the drawbacks of the way of

life

changes far eclipse the aforementioned benefits. The most important advantage is that people become

emotionless

not in physical motion

motionless

and apathetic. Technology

have grown

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has grown

rapidly,

therefore

, people do not care another people

instead

of concentrating on their smart phone. To illustrate, Family

life

use to be defined by the dining room table, a place where children did their homework and crafts and families ate together and discussed their day. Now, the dining room table has been replaced by the TV and cell phones. Another negative aspect of

devices gadgets

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devices, gadgets

is making them underestimate family tradition. To make it

more clearly

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clearer

more clear

, as society grows the generation gap gets farther apart. Children always think that the thoughts and actions of adults are old-fashioned and unreasonable.

Hence

, gradually the conception and tradition of the family disappeared.

Last

but not least, the way of living each day makes divorce increasing. The more

life

develops, the greater the gap between rich and poor in society.

Consequently

, when financially pressured, the husband and wife in a family conflict with each other leading to marriage breakdown. In conclusion, I would say that the potential change of style of living

are

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more significant than the possible benefits.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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In many places, people's lifestyle is changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of those developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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