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age, I
believe that it is an impact has equal positive and negative development. On one hand bright side of increasing the life has more advantages
and foremost parents are working
their children are alone at home in needed in order to
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home so they care their children
of trusting someone
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else, secondly
older people can teach us moral values ethics and traditional territory Edition. Tradition In which we are lacking in children, they broaden The Horizon of children by giving extra allow care and
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values, for
for example
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playing games with children
can spend time with their grandparents who enrich their knowledge It has
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has also led
lead to the pollution government have a look at them pension and retirement and
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