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IIn the future. It is expected that the there will be a higher proportion of older people in some countries. Is this positive or A negative development?

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And it leads to more. Old
age I
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age, I
 believe that it is an impact has equal positive and negative development. On one hand bright side of increasing the life has more advantages
first
 and foremost parents are working
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with
 their children are alone at home in needed in order to
taking
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take
 care of there. Higher the Tiger Higher Caretaker Is the
grandparents
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grandparents'
 home so they care their children
instead
 of trusting someone
else
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else, secondly
secondly
 older people can teach us moral values ethics and traditional territory Edition. Tradition In which we are lacking in children, they broaden The Horizon of children by giving extra allow care and
values
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values, for
for example
,
instead
 of wasting time in
playing games children
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playing games with children
 can spend time with their grandparents who enrich their knowledge It has
also
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has also led
also
 lead to the pollution government have a look at them pension and retirement and
also
 some free facility recharges in order to give in order to give them. Healthy life on early people due to the fact that they can can't do the job because of their Physical
capability financial
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capability, financial
 burden on government and Fab families increasing In conclusion, I believe that advancement of Technology leads to or ledge paper and it both have equal benefits and disadvantages.
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