Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody. Regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an early age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

It is clear that some careers require people to work much harder physically than others.
Therefore
, I believe that some workers should have the ability to retire earlier than others and
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
a pension at an earlier age. There are some jobs that require a
person
to sacrifice their health and body in order to do the job at a high level. Jobs
such
as being a police officer, being a firefighter, or being part of the military take a large toll on a
person
both physically and mentally.
Furthermore
, these jobs require that the
person
put their own lives on the line and the possibility of death is a very real outcome.
Additionally
, the work that they do generally is for the greater good of society and helps a lot of people. Where would society, and even countries, be without these professionals? While many might argue that
this
demonishes
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminishes
other public service jobs
such
as judges or politicians, these careers, while difficult, do not require the individual to push their bodies to extreme measures as the other occupations listed before. I believe that they should be highly regarded, but in terms of retiring early, it would appear that their bodies would be able to continue working even after the age of 65.
Thus
, the real questions that should be begged is how much of one's own
lifeforce
Suggestion
life force
is actually being utilized and given up for the greater good? If the answer to
this
is that one might be offering their own life to help society, and that the physical requirements are high in order to do so,
then
they should be given the ability to retire early. It may seem unfair to some that certain careers and jobs get to retire early and receive an early pension.
However
, it would be unfair to those who offer their lives
for
Suggestion
in
the service of everyone to be categorized in the same realm as an office
person
working a simple nine to five
job
Suggestion
jobs
. Those who choose to push themselves in these types of jobs deserve to be placed higher at the end of the day.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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