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To improve the quality of education, some people think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Other believe that this will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Teachers are the people who are not
famous but
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famous, but
 have noble status in everyone's heart, for they pay their whole life and valuable time to enlighten us and explore our potential ability. They just like the lighthouse to brighten our future and guide us to go toward the success. There is a heated discussion about some people suggest that students should criticise teachers due to improve the quality of
education
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 while others oppose
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 suggestion because of the disrespect and indiscipline towards teachers.
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 of all,
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 teachers have the responsibility to impart knowledge to students, they will give wrong information sometimes. It is time that students need to correct the mistakes given by teachers, for to avoid the misunderstanding of knowledge from occurring. It is undeniable that the critical relationship between teachers and students can enhance the quality of
education
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 as students who pursue the satisfaction of
win
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a win
 will find the answer by themselves and discuss with their teachers.
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 learning mode is better than cramming
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 because of the pleasant interaction. From another perspective, the excess criticism toward teachers will lead to irremediable discipline problems that seriously influence the students' behaviour. Some naughty students jeer the teachers with
irony
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ironical
 words when teachers make the mistake
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 action is
hurt
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hurting
 the teachers' heart or even causing teachers have the mind
of
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about
 retirement. Those students need to be punished or else they will deem
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 matter as granted and do not realise the seriousness of disrespect. In conclusion,
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 giving critical opinions able to make an improvement in
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, the impolite and rude behaviours are destroyed learning attitude.
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, students must have
the good
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the best
 attitude in the classroom in order to
learning
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learn
 without any adverse factors.
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