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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The proponents of the view that
climate
change
 could be harmful to
business
 may believe that the increasing frequency of extreme weather events occurring
as a result
 of
climate
change
,
such
 as drought, flood, earthquake, and typhoon, would disturb regular production and consumption in the market,
thus
 destabilizing the economy. When disasters occur recurrently, people could hardly engage in commercial activities, but
to struggle
Suggestion
struggle
 for survival.
Besides
, the financial loss caused by these disasters, usually on a large scale, would reduce
business
 viability.
For example
, expensive facilities and equipment in companies and factories would be destroyed by flood or earthquake, and
thus
 more money has to be spent on repair or purchase of new replacements.
On the contrary
, other people believe
climate
change
 would bring more opportunities to
business
.
This
 is so probably because governments always seek partnership with the private sector to develop novel technology and new means to combat challenges like
climate
change
, and
this
 will grant companies sharing the same goal more resources and support.
For example
, governments may make substantial investments in the green industry and
thus
 sponsor firms aiming to research and produce eco-friendly products.
In addition
, as people have to
change
 their lifestyles either to adapt to the new weather or to attempt to mitigate
climate
change
, new demands will be created, which could be opportunities for
business
 to develop new products and services
accordingly
. In my opinion, disasters brought about by
climate
change
 would not be a big deal in the future, because human beings are smart and hardworking enough to cope with all sorts of challenges brought about by
climate
change
. And
this
 has been sufficiently proved by the human history during which people were recurrently confronted with challenges and continuously overcome them. The commercial sector could contribute to the discovery of innovative solutions to problems facing human beings, and, in return, gain more chance to make profits.
Therefore
, I tend to believe that
business
Suggestion
a business
businesses
 would obtain more opportunities created by
climate
change
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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