The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
line graph illustrates the information about men and women who want to study in Britain in three decades. The data are calibrated into proportion.
To begin
with, the majority of the males want part-time education in 1970 whereas
only 10 % of male
want full-time study. Fix the agreement mistake
males
Furthermore
, part-time
education parameter decreased by 100 Correct article usage
the part-time
however
, there was an inclination in
full-time learners. Change preposition
toward
This
parameter is approximately similar in order to increment from both sides.
On the other hand
, females are playing a pivotal role in this
field. They are working by
760 but the full-time education pupils are only 10%. More so, Change preposition
apply
this
percentage was
increased rapidly not only in the part-time learnersUnnecessary verb
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
in the full-time learners. Besides
this
, by 1990-1991 the majority of the tutors are in part-time because they can do their household chores also
.
Overall
, both the
genders are continuously increasing their interest in both times.Correct article usage
apply
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