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By the advent of urbanization and the Internet, many people these days live in a nuclear family, with either a single parent or parents not married, as well as isolated from neighbours due to over involvement in mobile phones and the computers. It is often argued whether to find out about one’s family
history
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and keeping records is a positive or negative thing. I believe it’s always better to have a family record and in
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essay I would state my points and the reasons for the same.
To begin
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, many
household
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households
nowadays have a good
organization
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organizational
structure of their lineage, they often have meetings, prayers, picnics and parties and
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would ensure they are always surrounded by someone who love them, as said blood is always thicker than water. These people from common ancestry, even open schools and businesses, which in
future
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the future
could provide job opportunities and schooling for economic backward individuals from the family.
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,
today many
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today, many
illnesses have
genetic link
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a genetic link
genetic links
, means the disease runs in the family,
hence
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, keeping a family
history
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and family records of morbidities and mortalities could ensure better treatment for some young ones in the family.
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, recently an article in the Times of India showed a 3-year-old boy died of liver cancer, who started with abdominal pain, and eventually died, which was never accepted by the parents until they recognized that their descents had a strong
history
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of liver cancer;
this
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could have been avoided if the guardians knew about the illness in their roots.
On the other hand
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, some people believe that it would affect the privacy of the person to be involved in any
families
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family
organization and in
this
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busy world there is no time for anyone to waste.
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However it
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However, it
is an excuse
from
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for
those who doesn’t want to socialize. To conclude, I believe family
history
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gives people an opportunity to have
get
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gotten
together meetings and it would help to identify the diseases that runs in the family.

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