Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed

We already in industrialization era where myriad peoples often get
confuse
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confused
to choose their
job
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jobs
.
In addition
, many peoples have more tendency to start their own career rather than applying for a company or organization. In
this
essay I will discuss why
this
is happening and detrimental effects that we probably can gain from it. To start with, your monthly income as a free staff are higher than
usual employee
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the usual employee
.
Consequently
, an array of people will choose
this
type of occupation.
For example
; I have a friend his name is Raymond. After, he graduated from university, he straightly opened his own shoes store. My friends often make fun of him because they think Raymond is so stupid to start his own career as shoe keeper. Surprisingly, Raymond's monthly income is higher than his friends salaries that work as an employee. The
next
, it takes a lot of your money and resources.
Therefore
, many citizens are afraid to establish their own
business
.
Moreover
, if you have already succeeded establishing your own
business
, there must be a period when your customers are decreasing each day, and on
this
occasion you must be resilient and be patient about it.
For example
; I have an uncle that set up his own
business
. He has been working in
this
field for almost 4 years and currently his
business
is having economy crisis.
As a result
, many of his workers are leaving him alone because they do not get enough payment. My uncle is a resilient and hardworking person,
therefore
,
Accept space
,
he still believes that he can rebuild his career and
that is
why he always smiles whenever he encounters many issues. All in all, patience is the key factor to establish your
business
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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