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nowadays the crime rate is increasing especially among teenagers. what are the reasons behind it and how can we reverse this trend. What punishment methods should be used in your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary world, crime is a mammoth as well as ubiquitous
problem
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. The crime rate is including more in the teen
age
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group
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.
This
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problem
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 is spreading all over the world.
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For
 the
last
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 decade, the
age
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group
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 of teenagers is totally changed. I will put shine on both the reason and
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 will elucidate my views in the subsequent paragraph.
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 with, teenagers are the future of
upcoming generation
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the upcoming generation
upcoming generations
. There are plethora of reason of
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.
the
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The
first
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 and foremost cause is technology. Nowadays, the
age
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 of teen
group
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use
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uses
is using
 technology and misuse the equipment because of
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 crime rate is mushroomed. In a peer
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 the teenagers get up in
wrong things
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the wrong things
 and due to
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, they
involve
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are involved
 in criminal activities. On the flip side, there are ample of solution behind
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problem
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. Parents should separate
there
of them or themselves
their
 children from the
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 which is harmful for them.
Moreover
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,
guardian
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the guardian
a guardian
guardians
 should treat their child in a good way and
also
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 give some right opinion. So, that they can concentrate on
there
of them or themselves
their
further
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 studies rather than involving in hazardous activities.
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, teenagers should attend some seminars as well as campaign to get
enough of information about
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enough information about
 criminal activities. To conclude, I opine that teenagers
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 is
very sensitive
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a very sensitive age
age
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 that time the person does not
botthred
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bother
bothered
 about what they are doing
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should take some strict actions as well as they should make some new rules to aware teenagers.
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