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nowadays the crime rate is increasing especially among teenagers. what are the reasons behind it and how can we reverse this trend. What punishment methods should be used in your opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary world, crime is a mammoth as well as ubiquitous
problem
. The crime rate is including more in the teen
age
group
.
This
problem
 is spreading all over the world.
From
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For
 the
last
 decade, the
age
group
 of teenagers is totally changed. I will put shine on both the reason and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will elucidate my views in the subsequent paragraph.
To begin
 with, teenagers are the future of
upcoming generation
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the upcoming generation
upcoming generations
. There are plethora of reason of
this
problem
.
the
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The
first
 and foremost cause is technology. Nowadays, the
age
 of teen
group
use
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uses
is using
 technology and misuse the equipment because of
this
 crime rate is mushroomed. In a peer
group
 the teenagers get up in
wrong things
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the wrong things
 and due to
this
, they
involve
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are involved
 in criminal activities. On the flip side, there are ample of solution behind
this
problem
. Parents should separate
there
of them or themselves
their
 children from the
group
 which is harmful for them.
Moreover
,
guardian
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the guardian
a guardian
guardians
 should treat their child in a good way and
also
 give some right opinion. So, that they can concentrate on
there
of them or themselves
their
further
 studies rather than involving in hazardous activities.
Additionally
, teenagers should attend some seminars as well as campaign to get
enough of information about
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enough information about
 criminal activities. To conclude, I opine that teenagers
age
 is
very sensitive
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a very sensitive age
age
 that time the person does not
botthred
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bother
bothered
 about what they are doing
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should take some strict actions as well as they should make some new rules to aware teenagers.
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